Monday, September 18, 2017

What To Fix (Journal Entry 7)

Okay, yes hello. I overslept. Uhm, places in my rough draft I noticed were a little too rough...

Is it possible to just say "everything after the intro"? Because I feel as though that everything afer hte intro in my rough draft is too rough. That because I concentrated so greatly on the additions, that my words do not flow as freely as in the intro.

Things from the rubric I'm probaby missing:

  • I really need to differentiate between sections of how the book can effect large crowds vs a certain type of person
  • To expand on how the "text" affects the reader, maybe throw in a few quotes or reviews about the book
  • Literally why does the book matter? Look up to see if there is research on kids having fictional figures to identify with?
  • Start building a bibliography, dumdum
Things to consider cutting:
  • Find a new way to say "Percy Jackson and the Olympians" or "this series"
  • All the times I talk about kids relating to the text? Like, who else does?
Re-wording the paper:
  • Consider switching the place of the 2nd section paragraph

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